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[Frayhard]

Добрый день. Помогите с поиском ошибок в рассказе.

Revenge is sweet.
Boy Bill always took away candies from his neighbor Andy. Andy was extremely disappointed about that and swore to avenge. He's been giving sweets to Bill as much as he could every day for ten years. As result Bill became enormously fat and died because of diabetes at seventeen years.

[a.k.a.gibsonmpgu]

С русским вариантом было бы проще

Revenge is sweet.
The Boy whose name was Bill always took away candies from his neighbor Andy.
1. Что Вы понимаете под "took away ..."?
2. Каким образом он проникал в квартиру / дом соседа?
3. Я бы вместо "always took" использовал "used to ..."
Andy was extremely disappointed about that and swore to avenge take revenge.
He's been giving sweets to Bill as much as he could every day for ten years. - время в контекст не вписывается
As a result Bill became enormously fat and died because of diabetes at the age of seventeen years.

[Frayhard]

take away - отбирал, отнимал

He's been giving sweets to Bill as much as he could every day for ten years. - время в контекст не вписывается - какое время следует использовать?

[a.k.a.gibsonmpgu]

какое время следует использовать?

А Вы понимаете, почему нельзя Present Perfect Continuous испльзовать?

[Vika123]

я вообще не понимаю, когда нужно Present Perfect Continuous использовать;))

[Sergei Troizky]

я вообще не понимаю, когда нужно Present Perfect Continuous использовать;))

Непрерывавшееся действие, начавшееся в прошлом и по-прежнему длящееся, либо только что завершившееся.