Письмо работодателю. Хэлп ми, плыз

[Milana]

Помогите, пожалуйста. На пару с подругой пишем письмо работодателю (мэйл). Хочется как-то пограмотнее его выстроить. Пока получается следующее:

Dear Ms Castello
My name is Milana Nesterova. I`m one of participants on summer 2007 "Work & Travel USA program".
We (me and my friends, participating the program as well) would greatly appreciate receiving some information about our job/positions?? to come. (я хочу сказать про будущую работу без слова future. так можно?)

We are particularly keen to work in Philadelphia Zoo (food service worker is a title of the future job). Which kind of work exactly our duties will include?

Will we have to look for place for living by ourselves or you have the opportunity to assist us with that sort of things?

Have you got any particular demands?requsts for workers? I mean, black shoes and black trousers, no piercing etc.

And what about overtimes? Wii we be able to have some?
That is all for now.
Thank your in advance for your attention to these questions.

Yours sincerely,
Milana Nesterova

Подскажите, пожалуйста, как можно сие усовершенствовать, чтобы не прослыть перед работодателями полными олухами? ОЧЕНЬ СРОЧНО НУЖНА ПОМОЩЬ!

[Anna Bessonov]

Попытаюсь помочь:

Dear Ms Castello
My name is Milana Nesterova. I`m one of the  participants of the  "Work & Travel USA program" 2007.
My friends and I would really appreciate if you give us some information about this position.  (я хочу сказать про будущую работу без слова future. так можно?)

We are particularly keen to work in Philadelphia Zoo (food service worker is a title of the future job). What will be our duties? Whar about accomodation, does the company help us in finding one or we'll have to look for the appartment ourselfs?

Have you got any particular demands?requsts for employees? Is there any dress code for the employees?
What about overtimes? Will we be able to have some? (будут ли они у нас???)

Thank your for your attention to these questions.

Sincerely,
Milana Nesterova

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[Milana]

Cпасибо за помощь))

[chaika]

would appreciate it if you would give us some
in the Philadelphia Zoo (food service worker is the title
What will our duties include?
What about accommodation, does the company help us in find a place to stay or will we have to look for an apartment ourselves?
Is there any particular dress code for workers?
[I would omit the next sentence after that.]

What about overtime work? Will that be available? [то-есть, такая постановка вопроса передает желание work overtime а не наоборот.]

Некоторые ошибки в правописании в вашем оригинале исправлены.

[chaika]

опля! help us to find a place

[Anna Bessonov]

Я бы все-таки использовала бы employees, sounds more natural
Is there any particular dress code for workers?
Я ни разу не слышала от американцев, чтобы они использовани слово worker для обозначения работника той или иной компании, даже если это чернорабочий.